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Some things I checked (that should be checked by a fact-checker/copy editor) are specific words and products mentioned in the story, to make sure they existed or were used during the period in which the story takes place: (1) jalopy and (2) that there was a Hudson truck with a canopy. There’s no good reason to say “cancer cough” every time. The author uses ”spitting” but then “chuggin’” “something,’” and “fallin’”. I noticed, for example that sometimes the author uses “them” and other times “em”. The author needs to go through the entire ms and ensure consistency in the use of dialect.
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Then, I’d read the revision and go through it at least one more time to see what we both might have missed and if I have any other thoughts. The process from hereon in, if I were taking the story, would be that once the writer agreed to make changes and we agreed on those changes, s/he would rewrite the story. I’ve gone through the manuscript carefully. The author hasn’t done anything new with the zombie story but the voice is an interesting one and I enjoyed reading the story. Notes on “Church Shoes”-first of all is the title “Church Shoes” or “Dust and Dead’Uns”? I prefer “Church Shoes”-all the author needs to do to make that title work perfectly is go a little more into grandma’s shoes-that she’s wearing her best ones for the big road trip. Datlow was recipient of the 2007 Karl Edward Wagner Award for outstanding contribution to the genre and has been honored with the Life Achievement Award given by the Horror Writers Association. In addition she has edited or co-edited more than fifty anthologies. She was fiction editor of OMNI Magazine and SCIFICTION and is currently consulting for Tor.com. Below you will find the General Comments on “Deadduns” read the specific comments and the story without comments.Įllen Datlow is a multi-award winning short story editor who has been working in science fiction, fantasy, and horror for almost thirty years.